Cute apple story (Editing)
Once upon a time, long ago there was a green apple. It was very big and really green, it was also very cute. Other fruit did not like the green apple because of its beauty.
So(can't start with this word) there were 5(five)fruit in a fruit bowl in total.(:) two bananas, two oranges, and one green apple. The bananas always were together and oranges were also together, as well. Nobody wanted to be friends with the green apple. The apple always was alone.
Those fruit were just so jealous of apples, because apples as very successful in business.
One day, the cute apple decided to leave home to move to another city or even country. It was a really hard decision for the apple. But what could it do if nobody liked it? Even the humans, its owners didn’t want to eat it.
‘(")I am useless,’(") apple said to itself. So(,) it packed its baggage and leaved(left) home. The apple already had a train ticket, it was good. "Moreno-Rio de Janeiro" was written on a ticket. The apple finally took a taxi and was on its way to the railway station which was far away from home.
When the cute apple finally got to the railway station, it jumped in someone’s bag. The apple awake(awok) already in a train. It looked up to see what is happening outside, and just to check out if anybody was in compartment. Apple was too small to reach the bag zipper, so it decided to open a zipper with a pencil which was in a bag also, and only then jump out.
The apple had a really bad landing so it hit its bright green flank. How suddenly an apple heard a voice.
"What a cute apple." the girl said and picked the apple up. She first blow(blew) off the dust, and then washed it.
"Mommy can I take it with me to Brazil?" The(the) girl asked.
"Sure," the girl’s mommy answered.
"I finally got a family!" the cute green apple thought. It was now sitting on a table and looking out of the window.
When they finally got home, the apple was so happy. It was placed in a fruit bowl with other fruit. There was a mango, a guava and a coconut. The cute green apple had never seen those fruits before. It was staring at them.
"Who are you?" fruit asked the green apple.
"I am a green apple!" green apple answered.
"You are cute," fruit said.
So they were talking hours and days, and they were best friends until the girl ate the cute apple one day for lunch. Finally the apple was loved had friends and even eaten.
When you edit, you don't have to erase your mistakes.You can write correct words by beside. First edit by yourself and then ask other people to edit your writing.
So(can't start with this word) there were 5(five)fruit in a fruit bowl in total.(:) two bananas, two oranges, and one green apple. The bananas always were together and oranges were also together, as well. Nobody wanted to be friends with the green apple. The apple always was alone.
Those fruit were just so jealous of apples, because apples as very successful in business.
One day, the cute apple decided to leave home to move to another city or even country. It was a really hard decision for the apple. But what could it do if nobody liked it? Even the humans, its owners didn’t want to eat it.
‘(")I am useless,’(") apple said to itself. So(,) it packed its baggage and leaved(left) home. The apple already had a train ticket, it was good. "Moreno-Rio de Janeiro" was written on a ticket. The apple finally took a taxi and was on its way to the railway station which was far away from home.
When the cute apple finally got to the railway station, it jumped in someone’s bag. The apple awake(awok) already in a train. It looked up to see what is happening outside, and just to check out if anybody was in compartment. Apple was too small to reach the bag zipper, so it decided to open a zipper with a pencil which was in a bag also, and only then jump out.
The apple had a really bad landing so it hit its bright green flank. How suddenly an apple heard a voice.
"What a cute apple." the girl said and picked the apple up. She first blow(blew) off the dust, and then washed it.
"Mommy can I take it with me to Brazil?" The(the) girl asked.
"Sure," the girl’s mommy answered.
"I finally got a family!" the cute green apple thought. It was now sitting on a table and looking out of the window.
When they finally got home, the apple was so happy. It was placed in a fruit bowl with other fruit. There was a mango, a guava and a coconut. The cute green apple had never seen those fruits before. It was staring at them.
"Who are you?" fruit asked the green apple.
"I am a green apple!" green apple answered.
"You are cute," fruit said.
So they were talking hours and days, and they were best friends until the girl ate the cute apple one day for lunch. Finally the apple was loved had friends and even eaten.
When you edit, you don't have to erase your mistakes.You can write correct words by beside. First edit by yourself and then ask other people to edit your writing.